Witchfire Pt 9 Sneak Peek

After being distracted with drama and trying to reorganize the story, I’m back writing away at my Witchfire erotica.  After my realizations, I’m trying to up the excitement a bit more in terms of the main plot.  One of the things I’m going to do is expose the readers more to the villains behind the scenes.

With that in mind, here’s a sneak peek at a bit of Witchfire Part 9:

 

Meanwhile, at the mysterious villain organization’s headquarters.

“You heard me correctly, Senator,” the leader said, staring at the row of monitors before him.  “The Aberration went through the She-Legion like a knife through butter, but the witch somehow took him out single-handedly.”

“How the fuck did that happen?!?” one of the shadowy figures on the monitors demanded.

“Somehow she knew his weakness, and exploited it fully,” the leader replied.

“God damned it Cromwell,” a female voice with a slight Latina accent snapped.  “You assured us you have Delta City under control.”  “If the public finds out what the Institute is up to in Delta City, it will be all our asses in a sling, starting with yours.”

“There’s no need to be dramatic, Senator,” Cromwell replied.  “The Aberration test proved that the She-Legion is still useless and clueless, even with the witch’s intervention.”  “We also learned she’s a threat we need to take more seriously but she should be easy to continue to keep isolated.”

“Can you guarantee that the Aberration won’t be traced back to the Institute in any way?” another male voice demanded.

“Absolutely, Mister Secretary,” Cromwell replied confidently.  “If anybody has the skills to properly analyze his DNA, all they will see is Professor Pervo’s handiwork in genetic engineering.”

“I still don’t like it,” another male voice.  “Axis Industries should be taking the lead on Project Dominance.”

“Kiss my ass, Yuri,” Cromwell growled.  “Your second rate pharma company doesn’t have half the experience with technology or genetics as Cromwell Industries.”

“That’s enough!” the General barked.  “We’ve had this discussion before.”  “Things will remain as this council set them up until such time as the entire council decides otherwise.”  “Need I remind you what happened to General Wade when he refused to play ball?!?”

“Point made, General,” Cromwell said with a nod.  Yuri grumbled something resembling an agreement from the monitor he was on.

“Good,” The Secretary said.  “Double down on project security, and work on getting a new Aberration field ready.”  “It was the closest thing we had to a viable weapon.”

“Both are already in progress as we speak,” Cromwell replied.

“What about Bridge?” The General demanded.  “His sexual perversions are becoming a potential security risk.”

“He’s a pawn with little knowledge of our operations,” Cromwell replied bluntly.  “His electronics and telecommunications technology have been helpful, as have his financial contributions.”  “If he becomes a liability, he’ll develop health problems… fatal ones.”

(For more on Mr. Bridge, see Deanna Troi’s stories at DangerBabeCentral.com)

“With that settled, I think we can declare this meeting of the Council over,”  The Senator said.  “I have a National Security Oversight Committee meeting to attend in a half hour.”

With that, the other four members of the Institute’s governing council signed off, their monitors going dark.  Cromwell rubbed his goateed chin then straightened his suit coat, then turned to exit the control center.

“Best be careful, Max,” a woman’s voice said from near the doorway of the control center. “I think you’re starting to make the Council nervous.”  “Not healthy.”

Cromwell turned around, and flashed an arrogant smirk.  “You let me worry about the rest of the Council, Charity.”  “None of them have my intellect or vision.”

“Just don’t let those wax wings of pride carry you too close to the sun, Icarus,” Charity replied.  The leggy woman wore a professional looking knee length black dress and had her light brown hair in a low ponytail.

“Oh ye of little faith,” Cromwell replied with a chuckle so devoid of joy it could chill to the bone.  “And from my own troubleshooter no less.”

 

And that’s all you get for now…

A Witchy Realization or Two…

I’ve been mulling over a growing uneasiness with my Witchfire story line.  It has been an uneasiness strong enough to give me writer’s block.  Tonight, I think I finally figured out what it was.

Witchfire’s stories are set in a universe created as part of a superheroine peril site; DangerBabeCentral.com.  It’s fairly tame as superheroine exploitation sites go, but I still hated the way the characters were violated repeatedly, portrayed as air-headed at times, and just accepted getting violated as a hazard of being a superhero.

Witchfire was my attempt to drop a new character into that mess like another friend, Comixfana had done previously, and create a more tolerable yet hopefully still sexy version of that world.

Early on… Like 3 paragraphs into chapter 1, I realized she was coming off as the world’s bitchiest Mary Sue though.  So instead I dialed her down, tried to make her more human, and instead ended up with her being just another victim instead.

I also subconsciously fell into a pattern of projecting my own self doubts into her.  She was younger and couldn’t get anybody to listen to her, so the story arc got stuck in a repeating loop and I had to bring in another character to do what she SHOULD have done.

Those of you who don’t know Comixfana’s character are getting introduced to him this upcoming chapter.  Part of Sully’s lessons are going to be “you could have done this yourself if you didn’t let them make you doubt yourself”.

Moving forward, my answer will be bringing the She-Legion up to Witchfire’s level instead of “dumbing” her down to the level of DBC stories.  That will require upping the bad guys’ game a little too, but that will only make the stories more exciting going forward.

I hope this makes the stories more enjoyable for everyone, and will MAYBE set a better example for those reading the DBC fan fiction page.

 

As a side note, constructive comments on this or anything I write are ALWAYS welcome.  Anything where that might not be the case will have comments turned off.  You can disagree with me freely, just do so in a polite manner.  If you do that, I will NOT block you, drop you from my followed blogs list, etc…  Polite disagreement and discussion is how we learn and grow.  I am still capable of being friends with somebody and disagreeing with them on some things also.

Needless to say, positive feedback is also extremely welcome, LOL

A Little Background…

So I’ve decided to let loose a little information about me as a writer, and why I’m fairly private as a person.

Privacy, I’ll keep simple.  I’m an introvert till I get to know people.  I’ve also had more than my share of bad experiences online and offline, so I do have some trust issues.  Overall I consider myself to be fairly well balanced though.  I also have an Associate’s Degree in Network Security, which for the record is largely useless beyond scaring the crap out of you over how many ways there are to get and exploit your personal information.

Writing is something I’ve always had an interest in.  I’ve always been good in English related subjects.  I first got serious with it when TSR released the Marvel Superheroes pen and paper RPG (role playing game).  I had always liked comic books and this gave me a format for creating my own heroes and telling my own stories.  I ended up with about 20 of my own heroes, and about as many villains, and created the stories that my friends and I ran through.  We never got into acting out the roles of the characters, but the creative process was fun.  Then came video games…

Yes, that’s right.  As crazy as it sounds, a video game helped make me a writer.

It started with the City of Heroes MMO (Massive Multiplayer Online) game.  It had  one of the richest character creation systems ever seen in video games.  This led to many people who used to roleplay on old pre-internet BBS sites to jump into the game.  These were serious roleplayers that made up their own adventures and acted out the roles of their characters.

Why bother when the game had content, you ask?  The content ran out fast, then you were either left re-running old stuff again with a new character OR putting your imagination to work.

Yes, I know it sounds weird.  It did to me also, BUT I gave it a try despite being somewhat shy.  It took a short time to break through my reservations.  Being about superheroes probably helped.  Once I did, it was an AMAZING experience though.  Think of it in terms of a never-ending, constantly ongoing class in creative writing and improvisation.  We did live stuff on the server, kept notes and did cooperative written storytelling on our forums site.

Suddenly a locked up imagination that had been discouraged by parents and others burst into full bloom.  I was creating detailed characters, directing plots and having the time of my life writing out all of it.

Well, online roleplaying communities have kind of fallen apart.  The good players have moved on and largely been replaced by people who can only play ultimately powerful characters or see it only as an opportunity for cybersex.  I’ve developed characters and stories for City of Heroes, Champions Online, Star Wars: The Old Republic, Conan: Exiles and a few other games.

My work was generally well received too, but I never considered myself “good enough to turn pro”.  As my health became problematic and I grew sick of the increasing drama with multiplayer games, I started to look at it more seriously though.  Now here I am, hoping to make a go of it.

As for liking superheroes in the first place…  I didn’t have anyone to truly look up to while growing up.  They became my examples of people who did the right thing, stood on principles, and had the ability to make a difference and help others.

End of Year Update

I’ve been fairly occupied over the holidays, and have a love-hate relationship with Christmas.  The sentiment of the holiday is wonderful but I kill myself all through December trying to pull off an amazing celebration.  Hence I’m happy it’s over with.

Needless to say, I’m behind on my writing also.  I missed a Witchfire update last Thursday.  I’m going to be working like mad to get one done on time this week also.  It’s looking a bit iffy right now.

I did come to a few realizations about my writing however.  Partially due to some quality feedback from readers.  In my Conan story for example, Tyche had no character development at the beginning or during the story.  People didn’t feel connected to her or have a reason to care about her beyond being an enemy of Set.  A problem similar to my not explaining costumes and such for the DangerBabeCentral characters I’ve been borrowing.  I hope at least I’ve developed some personalities for them all that readers can connect with.

I also keep telling people on Twitter that I want to write professionally, yet I keep getting involved deeper and deeper with my Witchfire story.  It’s a wtory I genuinely want to tell through to the conclusion, but I feel I need to be better balanced there.  I’ve written 84,081 words for it’s 8 chapters.  That’s enough for a short novel, and I’ve barely advanced the plot.  I need to be better organized, map things out better and make my chapters shorter and more concise.

I think I’ve learned more about editing the last week than actually writing, depending upon how you want to take those two examples.

On a related note, I picked up a new book called “How to Write a Novel” by Nathan Bransford.  First I have to say it’s probably one of the most helpful books on the subject I’ve found.  I’ve gone through MANY books too.  It has 47 rules on the subject.

Rule #2 is Think of an Idea (subject or genre) you love enough to neglect everything else you enjoy in life.

Essentially you have to be passionate and knowledgeable on what you’re writing.  That’s helping me focus on goals and planning better.  It means even my professional work will have some superhero stuff, and that not all of it will be smut either.  I love sex too much to turn my back on smut though, LOL.

I also downloaded Scrivener; the word processor geared towards book writers.  I’ve barely had time to play with it, but it does seem nice thus far. Some things could be done in MS Word also, but not as easily or cleanly.  It’s too early to deliver an accurate or detailed review yet, but thus far I’m liking it.  More to come as I have a chance to work with it further.

All that said, I hope everybody has a safe and amazing New Year’s Eve and an even better New Year!

 

No Witchfire 8… Yet

I think a few of you wait for this on Thursdays. 🙂

Sadly the story just was NOT coming together this week.  I had health issues and other distractions.  What I DID get together I felt was an incoherent mess unworthy of my handful of readers.  I’d rather delay it and get it right than release a rough, half finished story.  I hope nobody’s too disappointed and I’ll do my best to make the chapter worth the wait when it comes out.

I’m (not) Famous!

Just a quick update.  I had a downturn in views over the last week.  Holidays will do that I suppose, but it went back up to 17 yesterday.  Not bad considering a tweet when I post a new story is all the publicity I go for.

I jokingly say I’m famous now because I got my first referral from Google.  The big bad privacy invader knows I exist, LOL.

Work wise…  I’m trying to keep up with my once a week Witchfire story segments.  That last one was too bloody long though.  But as I’ve said previously, the whole point is to get more practice.  I’m putting out the stories so fast that I don’t feel I’m getting writing practice (in terms of improving sentence structure, etc…) but it is helping my imagination and just being able to put a general story together as I try to put myself in the characters’ shoes and spin a plot as well.

This upcoming week I’m working on a rewrite of the Halloween story I did that ties in better to the main Witchfire series.  I’m also working on what I hope will eventually be my first published for sale story (ie NOT fan fiction).  Depending upon time and mood, I may even get other things written.

By the way…  Interesting note for my fellow readers and bloggers: My VPN blocks the “Like” button from showing up.  It doesn’t affect the Comments options at all though.  Go figure…  I have to shut off my VPN to give folks a “Like”, so if you get one, rest assured I meant it.  🙂

Post Drama Update

First of all, I’m trying out the upcoming new editor for WordPress.  It has alot of nice features, BUT I really don’t like the layout.  Everything is off to the side, like the options for adding tags and such on posts.  Working with word processors as long as I have, I strongly prefer that format.  Beyond that, I think people will like it.  Seems to have almost as many options as MS Publisher.

Beyond that, I’m trying to get my focus back and have been slowly plugging along at writing again after dumping ProtonMail.  Enough said about them though.  I should thank them, the couple of rants on twitter got me quite a few views here.  No likes or followers though.  I hope my writing is better than that, LOL. 

Air quality here has been utterly abominable; record level BAD, and that’s not helping my focus either.  Enough complaining though.  So what’s upcoming?

My current project is Witchfire part 5.  A large chunk of that will be the events that I just kind of did a quick recap on at the end of chapter 4.  It felt abrupt and poorly done there so I could finish on time.  After that, the Halloween story will be getting what’s called a “RetCon” in comic books; AKA Retroactive Continuity.  For all you NON geek and geekette writers; that translates out to “it’s getting re-written”.  My admittedly unusual idea for Hexanna didn’t mesh with existing stories when I found out that despite what’s posted about her, she CAN indeed cast spells without her staff.  So for the sake of consistency, I’m going to rework things.